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Kieran1uk

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Oh go on then, show us where the 2 commas would go to make perfect sense.

 

The father, who mistakenly claimed a Cherries fan snatched from his 12 year old son a top player’s shirt after it had been handed to the boy after a game against Saints last Sunday, has withdrawn the accusation.

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Nope, still makes no sense, unless you really think "who mistakenly claimed a Cherries fan snatched from his 12 year old son a top player’s shirt after it had been handed to the boy after a game against Saints last Sunday" does!!! Not sure whether you thought it did or whether you were just trying to put in 2 commas to make it better.

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The father, who mistakenly claimed a Cherries fan snatched from his 12 year old son a top player’s shirt after it had been handed to the boy after a game against Saints last Sunday, has withdrawn the accusation.

 

That's f**king awful -and being partly French I usually love a good subordinate clause.

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The father, who mistakenly claimed a Cherries fan snatched from his 12 year old son a top player’s shirt after it had been handed to the boy after a game against Saints last Sunday, has withdrawn the accusation.

 

Thank you. Though yeah, it's still not the best. :)

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The father, who mistakenly claimed a Cherries fan snatched from his 12 year old son a top player’s shirt after it had been handed to the boy after a game against Saints last Sunday, has withdrawn the accusation.

That makes absolutely no sense as an opening line.

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That makes absolutely no sense as an opening line.

 

Agreed, but it works fine as a follow up to some information about the father and his accusation. So what's missing is that information, as this sentence serves as a summary - of information that doesn't actually exist. Nevertheless, it is two commas away from being coherent, which is what I said originally. I made no claims about full disclosure or necessary context.

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