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Kadeem Hardison

Kadeem Hardison

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Those lyrics have really touched me. I have got tingles down my spine listening to that. The imagery is incredible - 'Dr David Banner mending a puncture on the roadside in the rain'. It really speaks to me. I don't like it when lyrics are concise and condensed down to so that the words speak for themselves. It is all too poetic for me. I don't go in for that drivel. Lyrics are much better when they are full of pronouns and prepositions. You know where you are with those sorts of words. I don't think there are enough songs that utilise the passion and meaning that a well-placed 'Yeh' can evoke. Even better even you can stretch that 'Yeh' to a few syllables. I am overwhelmed.

Wiltshire Saint

Wiltshire Saint

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I love this song! I think we should all buy a copy and try and get it to number 1 and keep that x-factor sh*t off the top spot. It'd be a real comment on how people have had enough of Cowell's manufactured pop-pap. We want real music! Real talent! I don't want my singers to be perfect. I like them a little off key. This fella reminds me a bit of Bob Dylan. And the lyrics are almost as good as well.

 

Well done Boj and the boys!

Baj

Baj

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Thanks for the comments, positive and negative. Steve doesnt claim to be an amazing singer any more than I claim to be an amazing guitarist (thats me playing guitar, incase you didnt guess), but what we both have confidence in is our ability as song writers.

 

Peoples ears are all too used to hearing autotuned, tweaked and 100 takes to get the perfect vocal, this was just me and steve, no warm up, no re-run, just 1 go at it.

 

Lyrics for those that care:

Say mister, point me the way west?

With this cup I am armed

To throw water at the Sun

Keep it cold in the morning

Preserve what went before it

It's all that remains

It's all that remains

 

If I told you what I'm thinking

Whilst I'm sinking to the bottom

Of this bottle of bourbon

Staring across the table

I think I might go on

I'm afraid of never stopping

Everytime I look up

It is the same

 

They say that we're raised

I say that they failed

They say that we're raised

Now we're fit again

 

For an age

I carried bricks on my back

Gonna build myself into

The wailing wall

I'm the picture of composure

I'm doctor David Banner

Mending a puncture

On the roadside in the rain

I am fit again

I am fit again

 

They say that we're raised

I say that they failed

They say that we're raised

Now we're fit again

 

They say that we're raised

I say that they failed

They say that we're raised

Now we're fit again

Now we're fit again

Now we're fit again

Now we're fit again

Now we're fit again

 

If I told you what I'm thinking

Now we're fit again

Ponty

Ponty

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If you were throwing water at the sun, to cool it, by heading west, you'd be keeping it cool in the evening. Poetic license is all well and good but let's try and keep it factual. ;)

Kadeem Hardison

Kadeem Hardison

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I have been inspired by Boj. Here are some lyrics I have written for you.

 

Whoa. Whoa. Yeh.

Sometimes I feel so down

I don't know what to do

Life is like a box of chocolates

Life is like a game of football

Except instead of a ball,

All I have is a empty Coke can

Battered and crushed,

Kicking against the curb.

 

I feel like that empty Coke can.

I feel that I have been kicked against the curb

Smashed up by the world

So I just stare at the empty

Packet of Bourbon

Creams.

Yeh, creams.

Oh, creams.

 

Life is so hard

It is such a bleak existence

Sometimes I am so down

That I don't know what to do.

Life on the edge, like Richard Hammond

Driving a fast car.

Will I survive?

Will I survive?

Will I?

Will anyone?

 

Life in a bubble, in a drunken mess.

I just want to run

To run

To run

To run

To run from here.

Sometimes I just don't know.

You don't know.

You don't know,

Whoa, you just don't know

How hard it is to run

To run

To run

To run

To run a successful IT business

and live a comfortable middle class existence.

Whoa.

Bath Saint

Bath Saint

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Kadeem, that is just beautiful. I can already feel those words resonating in my ears.

 

Now, if Sensus can put them to music and get their excellent singer to sing them, I reckon you guys just might have a hit of your hands.

 

Well done, one and all.

Junction 9

Junction 9

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Kadeem, that is just beautiful. I can already feel those words resonating in my ears.

 

Now, if Sensus can put them to music and get their excellent singer to sing them, I reckon you guys just might have a hit of your hands.

 

Well done, one and all.

 

I'm not sure we're going to agree on that one!! LOL!!

norwaysaint

norwaysaint

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It shouldn't be all about one-upmanship. I thought both songs were excellent. Kadeem's probably has the edge lyrically, but he probably couldn't deliver it so well in one take.

 

In Boj's song I could also feel the angst and despair that comes from working in IT and running a football based website. It probably is like being David Banner and changing a tyre.

Kadeem Hardison

Kadeem Hardison

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Kadeem's probably has the edge lyrically

 

I am flattered, but I have to admit I don't think I am in the same league as Boj. Mine really doesn't have the raw emotion of 'Fit Again'. Boj has that quality that few lyricists manage. I can see elements of poets and authors in the writing too. As I read it, I catch the well-punctuated poetry of Emily Dickinson, the fluid prose of Blyton, the rock operatics of Ben Elton and the beauty and honesty of Joey Tempest.

Baj

Baj

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Ahh, see here's the thing, people are entitled to their opinions and I don't mind. Art is, as always, subjective, and if 99% think it's utter tripe, that's fine, we think we have a locker full of great material, and so do those that show a genuine interest in the band.

 

I actually found the comments above amusing, particularly the reworked vocals :D

 

"Packet of Bourbon

Creams.

Yeh, creams.

Oh, creams."

 

genius !

Wiltshire Saint

Wiltshire Saint

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yeah, I'm worse, WAY worse...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7zyvZIfcHeA

 

I'm off to see Ffye Dangerfield in January. He's playing just 4 gigs nationally to pro mote his new album and the Guillemots are recording their 3rd album in the new year. What I'm trying to say is that sometimes an individual band member can go off and do solo stuff and be very successful yet still keep the band intact. Boj, after hearing your song I would urge you to go solo. I think you have a bteer singing voice than the other fella and there is an honesty to your work that I believe. The way you have dealt with the idiots on this thread shows me that you have musical integrity and I for one believe in your song writing abilities. I have a friend who is in A&R and if you want me to get him to come and see one of your solo gigs drop me a PM.

Baj

Baj

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Sorry WS, but I dont believe a word of that post, if someones ears are of sufficient quality that they can comment on Steves singing, then they are easily able to distinguish that steve has a better voice than I do!

 

I know I can't sing, that's why I don't do it much!

Kadeem Hardison

Kadeem Hardison

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I actually found the comments above amusing, particularly the reworked vocals :D

 

"Packet of Bourbon

Creams.

Yeh, creams.

Oh, creams."

 

genius !

 

Amusing? I think that you are being unfair, Boj. I sense that your 'genius' comment is not serious. Just because you have made it in the business, you shouldn't sit in your ivory towers taking cheap shots at us people that are just starting out. You have inspired me to make music and I have been genuinely appreciative of the wonderful music that you make, and all you can do is take the mickey out of the fans that have got you where you are today. I am a real fan of your amazing music, but I feel that the stardom you have achieved has gone to your head, which is a real shame. Just remember why you are as successful as you are... because of us: the fans.

Baj

Baj

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Kadeem, please accept my apologies, I was in no way poking fun at your clearly genuine talent. You were writing, as we say in the industry, a "parody". Had you presented some of your original material with no basis for comparison against one of my songs, then indeed I may have treated it with the curious eye of a musical legend, and is what, I identified your lyrics as a "parody" (there's that word again) of my own, and generally a parody is intended for comedic effect. If indeed you were submitting those lyrics as an alternative to the original, I will indeed see if we can incorporate some (if not all) of your version, though I must warn you that we split royalties equally between band members so you shouldn't expect more than 1/4 of the profits.

 

Thanks, and aplogies again.

Junction 9

Junction 9

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I'm not sure what to make of this thread now. I got quite drawn in emotionally by both sets of lyrics but now it seems that either one or both of them might be taking the p*ss.

Well I hope you're both proud of yourselves, symptomatic of this forum of late.

Junction 9

Junction 9

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What does symptomatic mean? This question goes to you, Junction 9.

 

If something bad is symptomatic of something else, it is caused by the other thing and is proof that it exists

Ponty

Ponty

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I prefer Baj's vocals, too. Your mate sounds like he's singing whilst driving on a cobbled street. Some people like that, I'm sure, after all Fergal Sharkey made a few bob, but it's not my cup of tea.

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